Ok, so I went to see the digitally restored rerelease of Jaws this week, and it is still a fantastic movie, holding up against modern movies remarkably well despite its age and that rubbery shark.
And that got me thinking, specifically about the conflict within the film. Conflict is the driving force in stories, the jet fuel that propels plot along, and I don’t think there are many better examples of conflict driven narrative than Jaws. I’m going to give you some examples here, and I am going to try and stay away from the obvious conflict of man versus shark. There’s a lot more going on in this film.
Take this scene from early in the film, when we are first meeting Martin Brody and his family. His eldest son has come in the kitchen holding up a bleeding hand.
Martin: You guys were playing on those swings. Weren’t -[Phone rings] Stay off them, I haven’t fixed them yet!
Ellen: I think you’re gonna live.
In this short sequence we see Brody telling off his son, the ringing telephone interrupts him, and then, faced with the choice of two telephones on the wall, he picks up the wrong one. See how much conflict Spielberg packed into that one tiny sequence, lasting much less than a minute? And we see Michael holding up his hand, with the blood dripping from it, in the background. A reminder that we are going to be seeing plenty of blood later.
Next, at the beach searching for the first victim, we see Brody stumble as he walks through the soft sand, and then at his office in conflict with his secretary – Polly, if this new filing system is going to work, you’ve got to keep this outdated stuff off my desk.
Even doing the basic task of buying paint and brushes for the ‘Beaches Closed’ signs, Brody gets stopped on the way to the hardware store by an old man complaining about the karate class kicking down his fence, he almost gets run over by a teenager on a bicycle, there’s an argument happening in the background as he picks up the paint in the shop, and he spills the pot of paint brushes all over the floor.

In this sequence on board the ferry, Martin is stopped from warning the swimming class of the shark danger by the mayor and town concil man. Mayor Vaughn bullies Martin into keeping quiet about any shark danger, and as the scene progresses Roy Scheider gets pushed further and further up against the edge of the shot. By the end of this sequence there is just Martin and Vaughn in the foreground, the Mayor dominating the shot and the scene.
Conflict is everywhere in Jaws, the filmmakers doing everything in their power to throw obstacles in Martin’s way, and humanise him, and his environment.
Why? Because, when he finally faces up to his fears, and destroys the shark in the rousing climax, we have identified with him so much by that point, and we are rooting for him so strongly, that we can’t help but cheer with him as the shark sinks beneath the waves.
So, what about you and the story you are writing? How can you add more conflict into your story, not just in the big set pieces, but the tiny little details too? Throw obstacles in your protagonist’s way, make that journey he is on an absolute nightmare. No one wants to read a story where the hero easily defeats his enemies. We want to see them struggle and fight, and come perilously close to failure.

Think of the ending to Jaws: Martin, who is scared of the sea, ‘We all know you chief, you never go in the water at all, do you?’ has seen his horizons shrink as the film progresses, until finally he is left clinging to a mast on a sinking boat, as the shark circles, waiting to claim him as its next victim. Talk about conflict and putting your protagonist through hell!
Put your protagonist through absolute hell. Don’t let him off easily. Don’t give your reader an excuse to stop reading and put the book down. Putting conflict in your story is one way of keeping your readers up until past midnight, telling themselves, ‘Just one more chapter…’
Ooh, I did a double-take there when I just spotted the little picture of me from my blog over on the right there!
Isn’t there some sort of ideal formula where the hero has to fail twice in his mission before succeeding on the third attempt? I may have got that wrong, but even if it’s right, you make a good point about there needing to be lots of smaller problems along the way – that’s what makes us relate to the character because every day we probably have several small obstacles to overcome. I’m going to ponder on this more…
You’re right, the formula goes ‘three disasters and an ending,’ with each succeeding disaster worse than the preceding one. The ending is when the hero overcomes and wins the day.
The formula also says that the 2nd and 3rd disasters should, in part, happen because the hero is trying to put things right.
This post was more about the tiny conflicts, the smaller beats between the major ones, that keep our protagonist on his toes, and keep the story moving.
Thanks for reading.
Interesting on many levels. First, I didn’t know they had re-released JAWS. Just when I started getting comfortable going back in the ocean, now they do that?
I didn’t know about the “formula,” but I found it interesting that the second and third were supposed to be the hero setting things right. But in the smaller scheme of things, I like what you said about a whole series of little obstacles to overcome. I never thought about that in JAWS, but it does seem like he can’t get anything done without someone interrupting him.
Great movie. Great post. Great reminder for WIP.
Paul D. Dail
http://www.pauldail.com- A horror writer’s not necessarily horrific blog
Thanks, Paul. The cinema release of Jaws happened last week in UK, but I read somewhere that the US isn’t getting one. I don’t know why, but the Blu Ray is out sometime in August/September. There’s an interesting video here – http://www.firstshowing.net/2012/watch-behind-the-scenes-of-universals-jaws-restoration-project/ – about the restoration process. I am a Jaws obsessive, and I have already pre-ordered the Blu Ray from Amazon.
I think the ‘formula’ of ’3 disasters and an ending’ is interesting and I am incorporating it into my latest, but, you know, at the end of the day we should make our own decisions on how to write our books. Something I am sure you are already very well aware of!
But it’s always helpful to learn these principles, and then make a decision about how to use them.
Thanks for reading. I’m looking forward to reading about your list of books to be buried with, I noticed you had that post up, just looking for a spare moment to do that. I’ll get there soon!
I can see why Jaws works. It worked bloody well the first time. my first ‘horror’ movie as a kid and it has stayed with me always and reading the book consolidated it too.
But delving deeper as you did, it makes sense. You want him to win, to cheer on the underdog just because there’s so much crap getting thrown his way. I agree with putting that into writing. A character that ‘has it all’ isn’t interesting. What’s the point? Now give him/her something to lose, something important…
Thanks, Wendy. Obviously I just touched the surface in my post, there’s a lot more conflict in the film. Also, I might do a post one day on the economy of storytelling in Jaws. It’s just amazing how they managed to condense down what could have been a ton of exposition into entertaining dialogue and action.
And that thing you said about cheering on the underdog, that was precisely what the audience did back in 75, when I saw it at the cinema aged 10. The whole auditorium of people leapt to their feet and roared their approval when Roy Scheider fired that gun and the shark exploded.
Anyway, enough about my obsession with Jaws! Thanks again.